Kids Write the Darndest Things–Elaboration and Fall!

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It’s back! One of my favorite series: Kids Write the Darndest Things.

I started this series two years ago during my first year of teaching when I saw that my junior high history students wrote silly things, were very create, and sometimes very deep, often all at the same time! I wanted to share these golden nuggets, so I decided to make a bi-monthly series with it.

If you’d like to read previous posts in this series, click here.

This year, I only teach one class: 7th grade Literature and Language Arts. We are focusing strongly on writing this year, trying to incorporate the main points the SAGE test (state standardized test based off the Common Core) will be looking at into our already strong writing program. So, we began the year with paragraphs: topic sentences, reasons, warrants, and elaborations.

This first set is a few examples on the elaboration practices we did:

Clear Description (strong adjectives and 5 senses)
“Chocolate strawberries are one of the best treats because they slowly melt the chocolate until it exfoliates the flavor.”

“When the smothered strawberry bursts with juices and flavors in your, it is the most delightful taste in the world.”

Simile
“When dancers spin and flip its like watching a monkey on caffeine”

“When dancers spin its like watching spinning tops with dresses on. It makes you so dizzy you become like a Ferris wheel”

“Dancers are like trees because they relax their limbs”

Explanation and Definition (explain the reason or define it to make it clearer)


“Constantly eating fast food is bad for peoples health. when we do our bodies store the fat for later and use some of it but the rest just sits there like a gallon of blubber.”

This next set was from their first writing assessment. They had to write a paragraph telling me why they liked fall, using one of the methods of topic sentences we learned and at least two of the nine elaborations we practiced.

“The third reason fall is the best is because of eggnog. Eggnog is a drink that tastes great and is a pie ingredient. The only thing that sucks about eggnog is that it only comes out int he fall for Halloween, Thanksgiving, and throughout the winter for Christmas.”

“As I carve orange, golden pumpkins, I feel so happy like a child getting candy on Halloween.”
“When I rake the leaves, I make them into a huge pile like I’m making a bed in m front yard.”
“I also love Halloween because of the costumes because I swished a three pointer with my costume”
“Walking through the island of maple colored autumn leaves release the smell of autumn leaves. the smell combines with the color and light. peeking through the purple mountains out comes the son. which makes it impossible not to stop and notice the beauty around me”
I loved reading their reasons why they loved fall and their different elaboration examples. I have some pretty creative kids this year and I’m excited to see what else they have in store!

Tayler is a work at home mom. She does free lance articles and dabbles in graphic design and virtual assisting for bloggers. She spent 3 years as a history and English teacher. Her passions are her husband, two children, history, reading, nature, and her Savior, Jesus Christ.

  • These are so good! It's so great to know that these are part of the younger generation! 🙂

  • Desiree @ Macke Monologues

    How awesome that Salt of the Earth is going to participate in your giveaway. YAY!! What an awesome deal.
    Holy smokes, some of the things your students wrote is hilarious! The three-pointer in the Halloween costume… HAHAHA!!!

  • This is one of the best things about teaching–seeing the way young minds work! =) Another one of the elaborations we learned was "sports metaphors", that's where the 3-pointer comes in

  • They are pretty dang strong writers!

  • I love these! Especially the "monkey on caffeine" one. Classic.

  • I cracked up when I read it!

  • These are too funny! Dancers are like trees…Where do kids come up with this stuff??

  • That's one thing I love about teaching junior high: their imagination!